ugh a rejection

[ranter]

big deal.
so i dont have an i.d.
let me in you awful butch dyke

fine

i will wait outside
i will loiter by the "no loitering sign"

so, i stand silently,
strutting to & fro,
soothing my angered nerves,
from the second time i have ever
been out of store such as this
(the second being with haugh-
daddy in ohio when we were
drunk)

so, i stand silently,
a lone sentry
saluting each person who proceed in & out
to make a sale. i say hello & goodbye.

i say goodbye to two
fellas who leave around
the side of the building.
two fellas in which
one returns to me.
to me he says;
to me he asks;
to me he requests;
to me he inquires;
to me he propositions, queerly:

"well, how much?"
"ex-scuse me?"
"you know, how much? you know...how much?"
"N-NO-O!"

so, i stand silently
staring at a scorned queer
flee to his escape,
his escape back to
his wife, his kids?
back to his scared secret.

so, i stood silently.

i noticed my surroundings.
it is late at night.
there are no stars,
sparkling in the gloom of a
cloudy night.
my face is splashed with an
almost dry mist of a rain
i cannot see.
i smell a most pungent aroma.
an aroma of grease
of dirt
of dried jissom
of smut.

::: just a spontaneous burst, i did after a most unmemorable encounter at a local porn shop :::

[parch]

interesting scenario...
keep posting
i'd like to see something that makes you feel more or just makes the reader (me) feel more...i did like the story...
it was nice how you broke up the story every now and then and added a little insight to your thoughts...but i need more please.

___---parch